南京必有达人雅思托福|锐哥托福丨113分的大神写作范文赏析,干货满满!( 二 )


-a marketing campaign - 市场营销活动
-relate to - 理解
-nerve-racking - make you feel very nervours and worried 伤脑筋的
Moreover, our colleagues or classmates provide us with more valuable information about improving presentations. As an old saying goes, the outsider sees most of the game. There may be several steps to the final goal. But sometimes, one can be too obsessed with some of the steps. Therefore, the missed ones may lead to failure. However, an outsider has a higher possibility of seeing it as a whole and give us more thoughtful advice. Let’s go deeper into the story I shared before. I am a person who easily feels guilty. If I had chosen to check the video recording alone, I could have fallen into deep denial of every aspect of my presentation. Fortunately, my colleagues worked together with me and discussed the “pros & cons” of my presentation. In my presentation, I shared some professional knowledge in my field of study, which I thought was unnecessary and might exclude the audiences from the presentation. I told Kun I would eliminate it next time to see if the result could be more satisfactory. What Kun responded to me was that showing a speaker’scompetence is an essential part of marketing. It was the way of showing it that needed to be improved. He suggested explaining professional knowledge by telling a story, which turned out to be very successful.
-the outsider sees most of the game 当局者迷旁观者清
-be obsessed with 痴迷于
-fall into deep denial of 陷入对......深深的否认
-exclude......from...... 把......排除在......之外
-competence n. [?kɑ?mp?t?ns] 能力
All in all, from my perspective, asking for comments from classmates or colleagues and improving the presentation accordingly is way better than working on the weakness alone.
今天的托福写作范文分析到这里就结束啦~后期还会有更多内容分享 , 大家不要错过哈!


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